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Old 05-30-2003   #1
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The Real Me

My only "deep" poem...hope you guys/gals like it.

"The Real Me"

Look at me down deep inside
To see the secrets that I hide

You think you know the real me
But you only know the pretend me

The me that laughs
When I really cry

The me that smiles
When I really frown

I go to bed thinking an unhappy thought
About how I was teased, tormented, and childhood lost

I don't have the happiest life
For I also live in a world of strife

My life isn't all happy and sane
But I also live with plenty of pain

You're too fat and you're too ugly
Those words left me cold and empty

You look sad, would you like a hug
Those words lifted me far above

The real me can shine through
But only if you're ready to see the truth

All I ask is please don't laugh
Or you may never know me

Please let me cry on your shoulder
Even when we get a little older

When I look down
PLEASE! Don't frown

Please just offer a smile
To lift my heart a little higher

You think you know the real me
But you only know the pretend me

Look at me down deep inside
To see the secrets that I hide...
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I like, I really do...but i think it's cuz it hit so close to home for me...
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I like, I really do...but i think it's cuz it hit so close to home for me...
I wrote this while on a church retreat. I don't know what made me write it but I do know that when I first meet a person I'm kinda wearing a mask until I know I can open up to them. That's how it is with my guy, I can tell him everything I think.

I was teased and told I was too fat to play with another girl when I was like 6 years old. Everyone I went to school with picked on me and made fun of me. There were a few times I thought of suicide but I'm too much of a wimp to do that. Also I don't want to leave the people I love. I cryed a lot...I didn't have any friends for about 7 years. Life was really shitty up until I was about 10. All the counciling in the world can't help me forget that. I seriously think the only thing that kept me alive was my music. We lived RIGHT next to the school and I'd take my little stereo out and dance to music. I didn't care if anyone saw me...I just danced. I sang a lot too. Maybe that's why I had the solos in the school plays. Who knows...

So yeah, there's a little about my childhood. It sucked.

*listen to the thunder roll*
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aww... youre really strong. and the poem is beautiful. =D
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I think your poems great. Have you writen any more?
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Its great becuase it has a meaning that I think relates to me alot. Like you most people don't see the real me. People come to me when they have a problem because I am good at listning. But to be good at that I have to hide any problems about my own past.
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You Poems are master pieces!!!!
Nadine your poems touch the pieces of my broken heart they are the best poems that i have read did you ever think of going proffessional.......
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You Poems are master pieces!!!!
Nadine your poems touch the pieces of my broken heart they are the best poems that i have read did you ever think of going proffessional.......
As a friend said to me, "You're bad for my ego."

No I haven't thought of going pro with my poems. They're all about love and crap. This was my first and only emotional poem. All my other poems are like "The Longing..." that I posted a while back. All lovey dovey. Here the link to the thread. If you haven't posted in it, please do and let me know what you think. Thanks

http://www.almostsmart.com/forums/sh...&threadid=2598
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thats good nadine. i can understnad all that u are saying. about, eh, hiding urself.
i give a little about myself to new peeps. but mainly i let them know exactly who i am...so that way i dont waste no time, if they are just going to jam later after i show them who i really am. ya know?

keep writing girl.
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Old 06-04-2003   #10
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Thank you. I'l try and write another one. It's harder for me to write the deep poems.
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"I Cry"
By: Nadine
(written in about 5 minutes)

Years go by
Still I cry
Wishing I would die
DON'T LOOK AT ME!
You make it worse
LOOK!
I'M BLEEDING!
It flows down me
Oh, it hurts
I scream
But you don't hear me
Am I invisable?
Do you not care?
I hate this
I hate you
YOU MAKE IT WORSE!
Damn you
HELP ME!
I'M BLEEDING!
All those years of hell
FUCK IT!
I don't care anymore
HELP ME!
GOD IT HURTS!
I'm bleeding
Deep inside
You can see it
See it when....
I cry
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ah see...

/me gets some bandages
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Old 06-04-2003   #13
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You're so sweet.

Thanks for reading my stuff. I seriously just wrote that one in like 5 minutes...JUST NOW!
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You're so sweet.

Thanks for reading my stuff. I seriously just wrote that one in like 5 minutes...JUST NOW!
yea, i try


and i've written some good work in about 5 mins. i really like how it is written in five mins. cuz then that means you didnt even really think about what you were writing. it all just came out. probably got stuck for 30 seconds on one line, but still. it just flowed ya know?
that poem sounded good too. how it was written.
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I kept tell a guy he was cute and he told me I was bad for his ego. Well psycho, You're bad for my ego!!

Thanks for your thoughts. It means a lot to me. MAN...Talk about opening up to people. yeah it did kinda just roll right off my tounge and on to the paper. kinda cool!
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CORRECTION!!!

"you're a bad influence on my ego"

Thanks, Justin!!!
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It Shouldn't Matter The Type of Poem

i like your poems, Nadine...and it doesn't matter if your poems are about love or anything. most of my poems are depressing or about finding love or about a guy or something. i have a few on Poetry.com and 2 of them made it to the publicists and are now going to be part of Poetry.com's book. So it doesn't matter what kind of poem it is...I've been writing poetry and short stories since I was 10, so as long as it's good, has meaning, and makes people think, whether good, bad, or depressing or loveing it's good to have it gone pro. You know? I made a girl cry last year from one of my poems---I was like, oops...
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a bad influence on ur ego?

umm, i dont know how i should take that? i get the feeling its something good though, but i dont really understand it..



and rosie, i have had some of my shit published by those fools.
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Re: It Shouldn't Matter The Type of Poem

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i like your poems, Nadine...and it doesn't matter if your poems are about love or anything. most of my poems are depressing or about finding love or about a guy or something. i have a few on Poetry.com and 2 of them made it to the publicists and are now going to be part of Poetry.com's book. So it doesn't matter what kind of poem it is...I've been writing poetry and short stories since I was 10, so as long as it's good, has meaning, and makes people think, whether good, bad, or depressing or loveing it's good to have it gone pro. You know? I made a girl cry last year from one of my poems---I was like, oops...
WOW!!! CONGRATS!! I don't know if anyone would really like to read my stuff THAT much. It'd be nice.

All I know is that now I have a headache from hell from writing that poem on neon pink post it notes! LOL
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I know the pain....but mine was flourescent purple....and the neon yellow ones.....ow...
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