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Old 01-17-2009   #1
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The Menander Device -- Old Revision

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Re: The Menander Device -- Old Revision

The beginning was really nicely written, but there was no climax, and the solution to the conflict was way too damn simple. I hope this is like a rough draft, and you wanted to give some semblance of a conclusion.. Besides the last page or so, I enjoyed it. Grow that shit, man.. add some more depth.
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