Countdown to Nothing

EmperorChaos · 07-01-2006

Here's a little bit I wrote a few weeks after a night of tripping psilocybin. I'm open to comments and criticism.

Countdown to Nothing

I now reflect on a mushroom trip

That followed a sizzling summer day

An event that caused my brain to flip

While citronella held bugs at bay

The corpse that had once been our globe

Now was so solemnly silent

Scorched forests--its only wardrobe

Left by the humans so violent

They had hoped for peace of mind

And blessing by their fake god

Instead they found that in time

Their beliefs were a façade

This falseness led to hate

And that hatred led to war

War ended in stalemate

Life renewed its vigor

Humanity springs

To a peaceful age

'Til human beings'

Hearts succumb to rage

With bombs they toyed

Doom now lingers

The world destroyed

Bony fingers

Blackened sky

Nature dead

Rivers dry

Oceans red

Rapture?

Crazed kooks!

God's Wrath?

No!! Nukes!

One

Breath

Come

Death

0

EmperorChaos · 08-12-2007

Hmm...

Well no one ever commented on this poem of mine with its meter decreasing as it is... I always liked that about it.

Anyway, that poem was actually one of three entire poems I wrote that were all inspired by the aforementioned (in the first post) night of tripping mushrooms.

This is part 2. I don't know if it will post correctly to this forum (there is a certain way it is meant to look.) At least I know part three will never be posted in this forum because the formatting just wouldn't look right at all. I'll have to attach the MS Word document if anyone is to read it so you can see the proper format.

Comments and criticisms welcome...
And, of course, I'm still open to criticism on Part 1.

-=-=-=-=-=-=-

Reawakening of Reason

My eyes twitched

The real world was back

Citronella burned out

Mosquitos bit me

The corpse resurrected

And there were green trees again

And a war on an ideology

Ah! The perpetual stalemate!

Humanity was never at peace

Our hearts have always been enraged

And the doom? My imagination?

The bombs were real.

The bony fingers – dead tree branches

The black sky? It was nighttime

Nature wasn’t dead – just sleeping (hear the birds?)

The rivers weren’t dry

And those crazed religious zealots!

There they are – bombing abortion clinics

Inviting Armageddon

For a

God

(that)

Doesn’t

(want)

(to)

Exist

07-01-2006	#1
EmperorChaos Ruin you like this website. Join Date: May 2005 Location: Charleston, South Carolina, United States, North America, Western Hemisphere, Earth, Sol System, Milky Way, Local Group, Virgo Supercluster Age: 39 Posts: 11,726 Rep Power: 147	Countdown to Nothing Here's a little bit I wrote a few weeks after a night of tripping psilocybin. I'm open to comments and criticism. Countdown to Nothing I now reflect on a mushroom trip That followed a sizzling summer day An event that caused my brain to flip While citronella held bugs at bay The corpse that had once been our globe Now was so solemnly silent Scorched forests--its only wardrobe Left by the humans so violent They had hoped for peace of mind And blessing by their fake god Instead they found that in time Their beliefs were a façade This falseness led to hate And that hatred led to war War ended in stalemate Life renewed its vigor Humanity springs To a peaceful age 'Til human beings' Hearts succumb to rage With bombs they toyed Doom now lingers The world destroyed Bony fingers Blackened sky Nature dead Rivers dry Oceans red Rapture? Crazed kooks! God's Wrath? No!! Nukes! One Breath Come Death 0 __________________ The first thing that came into being, void and without form, a lifeless lump, unfashioned and unframed, the Prima Materia from which all comes, influenced by forms and given structure by matter it becomes all that is, with increase in entropy it is into which all shall fall, endlessly and in all directions, a self-reflexive paradox. -=-=-=- "Self-education is, I firmly believe, the only kind of education there is." -Isaac Asimov

08-12-2007	#2
EmperorChaos Ruin you like this website. Join Date: May 2005 Location: Charleston, South Carolina, United States, North America, Western Hemisphere, Earth, Sol System, Milky Way, Local Group, Virgo Supercluster Age: 39 Posts: 11,726 Rep Power: 147	Re: Countdown to Nothing Hmm... Well no one ever commented on this poem of mine with its meter decreasing as it is... I always liked that about it. Anyway, that poem was actually one of three entire poems I wrote that were all inspired by the aforementioned (in the first post) night of tripping mushrooms. This is part 2. I don't know if it will post correctly to this forum (there is a certain way it is meant to look.) At least I know part three will never be posted in this forum because the formatting just wouldn't look right at all. I'll have to attach the MS Word document if anyone is to read it so you can see the proper format. Comments and criticisms welcome... And, of course, I'm still open to criticism on Part 1. -=-=-=-=-=-=- Reawakening of Reason My eyes twitched The real world was back Citronella burned out Mosquitos bit me The corpse resurrected And there were green trees again And a war on an ideology Ah! The perpetual stalemate! Humanity was never at peace Our hearts have always been enraged And the doom? My imagination? The bombs were real. The bony fingers – dead tree branches The black sky? It was nighttime Nature wasn’t dead – just sleeping (hear the birds?) The rivers weren’t dry And those crazed religious zealots! There they are – bombing abortion clinics Inviting Armageddon For a God (that) Doesn’t (want) (to) Exist __________________ The first thing that came into being, void and without form, a lifeless lump, unfashioned and unframed, the Prima Materia from which all comes, influenced by forms and given structure by matter it becomes all that is, with increase in entropy it is into which all shall fall, endlessly and in all directions, a self-reflexive paradox. -=-=-=- "Self-education is, I firmly believe, the only kind of education there is." -Isaac Asimov

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