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Old 09-28-2004   #1
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This is in the works.

[1]you ready for a head change?
dont play this game.
well you have to.
born into it for life.
give up life.
in fact give it to me
if you cant see
what should be
the simplest of all things
created for all and me.
Beauty.
[2]
[3]Now just chill.
Relax.
Smile more often
You cant believe you're alive.


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aight, so i figure this shit is going to be at least 3 stanzas. problem is, i only have half.
now i'm not looking for any of you to finish it. I just need an idea to go after [1].

this piece is really the only piece i've written in months.. i dont know why, but i've stopped writing. and everytime i try to write, there's nothing for me.
writersblock? fucked if i know..

anyways, help is very appreciated. any idea = a good one. what do you thinK?
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Old 09-28-2004   #2
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Re: This is in the works.

Is it a song?
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Old 09-29-2004   #3
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Re: This is in the works.

no.
just read it straight thru th efirst time.
doesnt it feel as if there should be another something there?

i mean it fits a complete thought to me, but i feel there should be something else after to ...fuckin...for lack of a better word, prove what im' thinking.

though i would not call it a poem either. think im heading into just writing rhymes and lines. ya knwo?
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Old 09-30-2004   #4
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what are you writing about?
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Old 09-30-2004   #5
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Re: This is in the works.

haha.

i guess how people can't really be themselves. ya know? in a way.
They act as if life really is that hard. It isn't. It just isn't fair in how it decides to work. Then people get mad. They say forget it, and they move on thru their life. I guess i'm looking for happiness. I see it everyday being destroyed.
What's beauty to you? Wouldn't that contribute to you being happy?

Nature to me, is th emost beautiful. It doesn't ever fuck up. It just is and that's it.
I think it's lovely.

Guess i'm learning how to deal with the rest of my life.
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Old 09-30-2004   #6
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Re: This is in the works.

It's poetry? I think you need to decide whether to rhyme or not. Becuase right now it sounds like you can't decide. Even though that can be powerful in some cases you need to refine it so it doesn't sound accidental.
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Re: This is in the works.

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haha.

i guess how people can't really be themselves. ya know? in a way.
They act as if life really is that hard. It isn't. It just isn't fair in how it decides to work. Then people get mad. They say forget it, and they move on thru their life. I guess i'm looking for happiness. I see it everyday being destroyed.
What's beauty to you? Wouldn't that contribute to you being happy?

Nature to me, is th emost beautiful. It doesn't ever fuck up. It just is and that's it.
I think it's lovely.

Guess i'm learning how to deal with the rest of my life.
scrap the poem.

use that.
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Old 10-01-2004   #8
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Re: This is in the works.

thanks anyways.

but watch.
i got it.

just give me a couple more days
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Old 10-01-2004   #9
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Re: This is in the works.

go with it dude, if you are confident in it...work it out.
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Old 10-19-2004   #10
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Re: This is in the works.

You ready for a head change?
Don't play this game.
Well you have to
Born into it for life
Give up life.
In fact give it to me
If you can't see
What should be
The simplest of all things
Created for all and me.
Beauty.

One literally with nature.
Don't hate you
You somehow care.
It's the order of things
Or is it,
How do you make things?
However you want things
Whatever is everything
I like nothing.
Crazy?
I said it was the order of things
To be one with nature.
Loving all that's around you
With no extra cost
But only the loss
Of your own life.
And that's okay.

[3]

Now just chill.
Relax.
Smile more often
You cant believe you're alive.


::Still not done.::
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Re: This is in the works.

really nice job! i liked this part:
"To be one with nature.
Loving all that's around you
With no extra cost
But only the loss
Of your own life."

yeah, haha, again, great job!
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Re: This is in the works.

I love it Matt..

This is what I was talking about.. the more you expand it.. the more amazing it will be. If you choose to read it in that form, ya know? Keep writing on it. It's good.
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Re: This is in the works.

i actually wrote those pieces way before you mentioned slam poetry.

i knew somewhere out there they were doing the same thing! lol nah.

but it's wierd how i had it goin, and then i hear about it. good to work on now. a new style i can appreciate. not that i dont about writing..*kali*

jk.
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