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Old 05-10-2005   #1
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Canadian Monopoly

Canadian Monopoly

Itís like the scene from the old five dollar bill,
except thereís three of them.
Three tall loons, gliding across a brown riveró
synchronized to the harmony of grasshoppers
and draining streams.

Last year the government stopped putting animals on our bills
(the animals are now printed on coins instead).
And to replace the loon, there are now hockey players.
All this in an attempt to get other countries
to take us more seriously.
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Old 05-10-2005   #2
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Re: Canadian Monopoly

Ah, the absurdity of politics.

I will merely say that, musically speaking, a synchronised harmony is about as oxymoronic as... something very oxymoronic. It stuck there like a thorn in my side, couldn't get past it. So, therefore, the following line was rather distant and the image (when i look at it now) is non-existent because of my hesitance.

But a nice image nonetheless (when seen independently).

I'd love to see 'stopped' replaced by some beureaucratic jargon, and the rest of the stanza too. Maybe some inverted comma's to indicate aloofness?

Also: Nothing sexual here.
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Re: Canadian Monopoly

It's sad mostly because I have a huge poli-sci exam tomorrow and know no bureaucratic jargon.

Thanks for the comments; I'll see what I can do about harmony.
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Re: Canadian Monopoly

(i can't spell bureaucratic. I feel 'peshul.)

i'm curious, what sort of theme are you attempting to explore here?
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Re: Canadian Monopoly

Being Canadian, i like it, its kinda funny lol
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Re: Canadian Monopoly

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Being Canadian, i like it, its kinda funny lol
Awesome, that's what I was going for.
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Re: Canadian Monopoly

do you guys really have Hockey players on ur bills? that's awesome.
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Re: Canadian Monopoly

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do you guys really have Hockey players on ur bills? that's awesome.

Well not really.

On the 5 dollar bill there is a scene with some kids playing hockey.
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Re: Canadian Monopoly

yea, i wish money aroun dhere would look like that. mayb ethat'd determine me to get some....

i probably shouldnt have said that....the FBI is watching...
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