Seven Dreams, Each Unwinding

[Sir Auric]

Seven Dreams, Each Unwinding



Seven times, I've dreamt of you.
Seven stories I will tell.

The first was dark and trying...
You were walking into a shadow,
Calling into blackness...

The second was a bit less blackened...
You were sitting, hands in lap,
Wondering who I am.

The third shed light on things to come...
You were thinking, smiling brightly,
Laughing to yourself.

In the fourth, something happened.
I was running into that shadow,
Searching for your face.

The fifth approached as we first met...
The shadows fell and I embraced you;
The passion soon erupted.

In this sixth dream, we were lovers...
We were quiet and thrust through love.
Nothing could be better.

In the last, the dream did shatter...
Shadows came againi, but we stood together.
They sheltered us from all.

[Summer Gurl]

:wink: its wonderful!

[sazzle]

One question. Why all the elipses?
You also have some spelling errors in there, and tense issues. "Wondering who I am [was]."

I must say, i was actually a little clueless as to the point of this poem. It just seems that you and your girlfriend do an awful lot of running in and out of shadows.

[Ker_Bear]

although we may not talk anymore...mike, I still think you're one of the best poets I know...which doesn't say alot lol..but I always enjoy your work. oh by the way, did you know our b-day is on the same day?! rightous.

[Sir Auric]

Sazzle, I see that tense error...oops.

Thanks for the read.

I only saw one typo, though.

I misspelled "again."

Keri, thank you for the compliment.

Our b-day is the same...sweet!

[psychoDiablo]

whats with you and your darkness ? that lady who holds darkeness within her, this crap, ... write someting different.

your work sounds the same.

[Sir Auric]

They're not all the same.

Besides, the darkness is defeated in this one.

Life is darkness, Matt.

Darkness illuminated.

[psychoDiablo]

lol Frea.

i dont mean that they are all the same as in the same poem. i ment that the words sound the same. the words from the other poems sound like words from this one...ya knwo?

kind of like Korn's Untouchables cd. notice his lyrics in the songs. nearly all them the same.

[me inside]

Yeah you seem kinda liking darknesss...lol i loved it although u have some errors!

[Sir Auric]

Darkness envelopes our souls.

Without darkness, there would be no hope of light.

Without the hope of light, there would be no will to defeat the darkness.

[me inside]

“ We shouldnt fear the darkness around us, we should fear the darkness inside our little hearts to rid ourselves of our shadows - who we are - we must step into either total light or total darkness”

[psychoDiablo]

good thing im able to see in the darkness. things really arent so bad.

i've developed a special ability anyone can acheive really. it's easy. all you have to do is open your eyes.