painted tears

[Mr Stabby]

Tattooed ink sinks deep into my flesh,
sits under my skin, marking me forever,
fading in time, like a distant memory,
a memory of you...

The lines are drawn with such precise,
never wavering, staying true,
like many things in this life,
much like my love of you...

my tears falling, staining the letter,
which I wrote to you, but havent sent,
like some bad emo song, powerful in lyrics and strut,
but yet lacking in thought,
with these painted tears drowning it away...

[poopy]

it doesn't rhyme

[Mr Stabby]

who gives two shits whether it ryhmes or not....

[Lady-Luck]

i agree, it doesnt have to rhyme, its a good poem, fading in time, like a distant memory,
a memory of you...
i think it would be more effective if you put the last line on its own the same goes for the other stanza's, cause i think its too sudden like it is now, but thats just a suggestion of course, its your poem afterall and you may have a reason, if you do just ignore me :biggrin:

[SketchImpressions]

creative juices often flow stronger when your in pain. (though thats a bit sadistic of the world, its true)

[Sir Auric]

There's nothing wrong with this.

It displays itself well without a ryhme scheme.